Talk:Platform 2013-2014

Typos & Typos pointed out will be fixed. Content suggestions and feedback will be parsed through the editors for suggestions going towards the 2014-2015 Platform.

Healthcare

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(Alternatives to FASTER & EFFICIENT?)

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"... a centrally planned monopoly that tramples new ideas and competition, ...". How about "... a centrally planned monopoly that inhibits new ideas and forbids competition ...". --Jim McIntosh 14:31, 19 January 2013 (EST)

You single handedly identified, THE MOST debated single word, in that entire document.--Jeffrey McLarty 14:42, 19 January 2013 (EST)

I agree "...that inhibits "innovative" ideas and forbids competition..." would be a more appropriate terminology. --Neal 16:52, 19 January 2013 (EST)

I like Jim's wording. --Allen Small 21:35, 19 January 2013 (EST)

Since this was not a change of intent and message, this text was implemented during the "typo" revisions.--Jeffrey McLarty 08:23, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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Budget

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(Alternatives to LOWER & SIMPLIFIED?)

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"Government revenue is a necessary part of maintaining a legal system in Ontario, ..." Instead -
Government revenue is necessary to maintain law and order in Ontario, ... --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

Since this was not a change of intent and message, this text was implemented during the "typo" revisions--Jeffrey McLarty 08:25, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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• End corporate welfare
  • Don't give our hard earned dollars to companies so they can produce more of what we don't want to buy. --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

• This would be a change in message and intent of the document, which would require a new vote of the caucus. --Jeffrey McLarty 08:28, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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• "Sole(?) flat income tax" - Don't need "Sole", just "Flat income tax," or "Flat tax rate".
  • "Constant Percentage of income" --> "Fixed percentage of income"

--Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST) Since this was not a change of intent and message, this text was implemented during the "typo" revisions --Jeffrey McLarty 08:28, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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Education

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(Alternatives to SMARTER & INSPIRING?)

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• Will voters understand what we mean by "liberate?" --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

• This is some of the expertmental language, which we're going to look for feedback on. --Jeffrey McLarty 08:35, 28 January 2013 (EST)

• Stop bureaucrats from interference in education
  • Stop bureaucrats from interfering in education --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

- Corrected --Jeffrey McLarty 08:35, 28 January 2013 (EST)

• More options and innovation to curricula
  • More options and innovation in curricula --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

- Corrected --Jeffrey McLarty 08:35, 28 January 2013 (EST)

• Merit pay for teachers? --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

This would be a change to message and intent, so it technically would require a new vote. --Jeffrey McLarty 08:35, 28 January 2013 (EST)

• Improved schedules for parents & children
  • Better schedules for parents & children --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

- Corrected --Jeffrey McLarty 08:35, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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Energy

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(Alternatives to CHEAPER & ABUNDANT?)

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• Will voters know what risky energy programs are? Nuclear?--Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

This is another example, of language we're going to test the waters with. There are risks to ANY project. Most times, unquantified. --Jeffrey McLarty 08:36, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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• Sell Ontario Power Generation assets (i.e. break it up for increased competition.) --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

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Jobs

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(Alternatives to SECURE & REWARDING?)

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fulfilment should be fulfillment --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

• Corrected --Jeffrey McLarty 08:38, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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• Jobs provide income and emotional fulfillment.
  • Jobs provide income and personal fulfillment. --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)

• corrected.--Jeffrey McLarty 08:38, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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• or giving special legal privileges to unions or employers. (Provide a little balance.) --Jim McIntosh 02:23, 24 January 2013 (EST)
• corrected --Jeffrey McLarty 08:37, 28 January 2013 (EST)

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